Tila Tequila

what do u think of my plot?

I’m writing a book (or at least i hope it will be a book)

My main character Darrah, (Female 26, black hair, vibrant green eyes, porcolin white skin) finds herself in a wooded area not knowing where she is how she got there.

She has urges she cant help but follow. she kills a hare and drains it of blood.
Feeling disgusted with herself, she wanders around teh woods.
She needs to get covered away from the coming sunlight. so she finds an old mine shaft. There she meets Audustus. he is lovely (dark olive complexion, grey eyes, scruffy short brown hair).

Augustus teacher her what she is (vampire) although she hates this intently she has no choice but to accept it.

Else where: Adicus (the king of the territory [long shoulder length hair, dark brown eyes, caucasion complexion]) has learned of a prophecy called the ‘Eventide Wiffman’, it was written long ago by a great king of the territory with the ability of forseeing the future; saying that a woman with name and hare of night and skin nad eyes of day would show her self unexpectadly. she would possess powers even she was unaware of. surrounding kings of other territories would try to de-throne Adicus and take the prophecy for hiself. it is told that if the king of the territory were to wed the prophecy that he woul be in power for all eternity and could rule without threat of being de-throned by another. This was what drove Adicus to find adn wed te prophecy.

Darrah prefers the comapany of humans to vamps, she meets a gaaky young man in a library – he is obsessed with mythical creatures, vampires being his favourite.

Adicus uses Augustus to deliver a message to Darrah to meet him one night by the river in the woods.

Augustus accompanies Darrah. (their relationship is developing into a strong friendship)

Adicus tells Darrah of his believe that she is of prophecy. She refuses to believe this angry and upset that she has the attentions of a powerful king, things begin to happen with hte water (rises unexpectadly, waves form, flow suddenly stops etc) in the river bed; that can only be put down to her development of psycic abilities.

Adicus tells Augustus that he is to have nothing more to do with her, he sees him as a threat to his grand scheme, he hold him hostage in his quarters.

vamps from other territiories come adn try to kidnap Darrah.
Adicus comes to the resque (he has spies watching her) and offers her security in his home.

Darrah finds Augustus there adn is horrified that Adicus could do such a thing. She was convinced that Augustus didnt want anything to do with her. she told Adicus that if she didnt let Augustius go she would never wed him. It was proven that augustus had strong feeling for her when he took her to his home, she never knew he had a house, only thinking that he stayed in the mine for n where else to go.

They plotted ways to de-throne adicus.

one of adicus’ researchers betrayed him and allowed enemy vamps into the territory without anyone else knowing.

There was a battle that broke out, adicus was wounded, and taken hostage tortured until he gave the where abouts of te prophecy. he never spoke.

Augustus took this to his advantage and took the throan for himself, being Adicus’ second in command. He wed Darrah privatly and the other vamps had no choice but to release Adicus. Adicus was furious about the events that had happened, but if it werent for them he would have been killed. He was made second in command.

So it’s a working progress.

i have the first 3 chapters working on the 4th atm. What do you all think??
i’m an avid reader. i personally find books that dont have alot going on really dull and boring. i like books that make the reader think, im hoping that tis is what my book will provide.
Adicus, i dont think is beautiful. maybe it’s just because i dont like men w/ long hair, but i think he is far from beautiful.
Darrah, i believe is just average, she has black hair, green eyes and pale skin. i dont think thats exceptionally beautiful. pretty yes, but lots of people in my opinion are pretty.
Augustus; yes he is very handsome. but he isnt a lead, he is a love interest and we (the reader) see him through Darrah’s eyes. She sees him as beautiful so we do aswel.